Vox Humana
06-08-2005, 08:09 PM
"Val" <vlongpre@rogers.com> wrote in message
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> Would you call this company if the ad looked like this? curious... Or
should
> it be modified some more.. Thanks in advance for all the support
> Val
I find the text hard to read. It is more important to communicate than to
use every graphic tool available in a software package. Blank space is just
as important as text or graphics when designing an add. I think there is
way too much going on graphically without any central focus. There is too
much color and ultimately this will cost you a lot of money. I think the
add would reproduce very poorly in gray-scale. I would enlist the help of a
graphic arts student or hire a professional. I don't want to sound mean,
but if you compare this to adds in the Yellow Pages from large companies
like Service Master (who you will compete with) you will probably see a huge
difference.
I think the name "dust bunny" is good. However the bunny in your picture
isn't all that appealing. Furthermore, it doesn't convey the message you
want to project. You need to combine the picture of the bunny with the mop
to create a "dust bunny." Right now there are two separate images that
cutter the ad where one image that tells the story would be better. When I
look at the ad, it could be for a pet store. You only have a millisecond to
grab someone's attention who might be looking for a cleaning service.
I would re-think the copy. You have a strange mix of words that don't seem
to tell a story. "Sweep - Dusting -- Kitchens" and so on. This could be
more concise and more focused. I would say something like "We can clean
every surface in every room of your home."
I would also like to know if you are insured and bonded if you are working
in my home. Do you have any experience? Is your work guaranteed?
news:Ksbnc.460065$2oI1.240612@twister01.bloor.is.n et.cable.rogers.com...
> Would you call this company if the ad looked like this? curious... Or
should
> it be modified some more.. Thanks in advance for all the support
> Val
I find the text hard to read. It is more important to communicate than to
use every graphic tool available in a software package. Blank space is just
as important as text or graphics when designing an add. I think there is
way too much going on graphically without any central focus. There is too
much color and ultimately this will cost you a lot of money. I think the
add would reproduce very poorly in gray-scale. I would enlist the help of a
graphic arts student or hire a professional. I don't want to sound mean,
but if you compare this to adds in the Yellow Pages from large companies
like Service Master (who you will compete with) you will probably see a huge
difference.
I think the name "dust bunny" is good. However the bunny in your picture
isn't all that appealing. Furthermore, it doesn't convey the message you
want to project. You need to combine the picture of the bunny with the mop
to create a "dust bunny." Right now there are two separate images that
cutter the ad where one image that tells the story would be better. When I
look at the ad, it could be for a pet store. You only have a millisecond to
grab someone's attention who might be looking for a cleaning service.
I would re-think the copy. You have a strange mix of words that don't seem
to tell a story. "Sweep - Dusting -- Kitchens" and so on. This could be
more concise and more focused. I would say something like "We can clean
every surface in every room of your home."
I would also like to know if you are insured and bonded if you are working
in my home. Do you have any experience? Is your work guaranteed?